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First Time

His fingers dance upon my skin
As he begs to be let in,
His lips, so warm, tease my ear
As his breath dances
The fear disappears.

Bodies close as close can be
Not a thing between him and me.
His kiss so soft,
Tongue hot as fire,
Coaxing my own to dance.

With him inside,
We lose track of time,
Our hearts beat
Through the pain
To brand new, sweet pleasure.

The first time of many,
At this point, is done.
I could lie here,
Forever,
In his arms, hot as the sun.
:iconshadowbat2034: and I had a conversation about how there isn't a lot of good erotic poetry without using certain words and I ended up grabbing a notepad and pen and writing.

I know the line 'Not a thing between him and me.' is probably grammatically wrong, but it flows really well like this, so I'm pretty much ignoring if it's wrong.

I had a title of First Time already, but First Time fits this piece and that one, so this got an -erotic added to it.

I'm not fully sure if it fits erotic, but after looking at the category, yea, this is where it goes. First upload of 2011. First upload in a few months.

Please let me know what you think. If I should write more like this (this as in erotic style).

No, I'm not putting a warning for maturity thing on this. If I'm given a nice, calm, logical reasoning for why it should have one with no cursing, no mention of certain words, etc. then maybe I will think about it.

Update: Jan 24, 2011
Holy crap! O.o This is my most faved deviation currently. Thanks folks!
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fandomverse95 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Great :)
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Razor13 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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fandomverse95 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional Writer
you're welcome
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Shex22 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011
well done
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Razor13 Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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pijolin Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
Very nice and sweet
I like it
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Razor13 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. =)
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Spiritboundwolf Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2011
Awesome poem
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Razor13 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. =)
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Spiritboundwolf Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2011
Your welcome
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